SAT essay 1: closed doors make us creative? 7/05

This essay was written approximately sometime in the beginning of July 2008. Pre-English tutoring sessions:

The belief that "Closed doors make us creative" is one that is an oxymoron in itself. In fact, uit is often the contrary--"closed doors", whether the term carries a literal or figurative weight, limits our possibilites. By closing off and restricting certain things, our minds are instantly provoked to look beyond the doors, to search for ways around them. However, the creativity instilled by restrictions and limitations can not be assumed to be universally permeating. The idle mind's idleness will only be enhanced by limitations, and the "Closed doors" may become an excuse not to think at all.
The inventor's being is defined by his or her desire to go beyond the known and get creative with reality. Those who possess the curisotiy and wonder required to be creative naturally strive to leap across restrictions of all kinds. Thus, they are the ones who apply best to the phrase 'closed doors make us creative'. One of the greatest inventors of all time, Thomas Edison, wanted to improve upon an easier development--something most inventors hope to achieve. It was not that there was an intolerable NEED for an artificial light source, it was just that the enticing possibility of developing one. Edison's time had been restricted to using non-electrical sources of light, so he got creative.
Most modern technology can be traced back to similar situations. There was an earlier invention that could be improved upon, a sense of restriction because of the limited options, and an individual who used innovative ideas to create something better despite, or perhaps because of, the said limitations.
The belief can also be supported by historical events. Inevitably, the masses become unhappy with the way they are treated and rebel. They are, in a sense, behind closed doors. In order to surpass such restrictions, they rebel against the "Doors", or in most cases, the government. The equation for a revolution, which one might argue counts as being "creative", is unhappy people plus a restricting government.
It takes an active mind, but closd doors do tend to force individuals to search for alternative methods, for windows to the outside. Whether the method be an invention or a social movement, restrictions seduce the dsire to free oneself from them.

SCORE: 9
Reason: Needs more structure.